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Expanding the non-smoking areas is more beneficial to Hong Kong citizens than increasing the tobacco tax. Do you agree? Explain your answer with reference to the sources and your own knowledge.

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The provided graphs compare information about the amount of
energy
production
 which was divided into five different subcategories in France, between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, whilst
production
 from five different fuel sources increased, petrol saw a dramatic fall. Another interesting point is that nuclear power was nearly doubling. As regards three bigger
energy
 sources were Coal, Gas and Petrol with 29,8%, 29,63% and 29,275, respectively. As there was a slight increase of roughly a per cent in 2005 and coal was of the highest importance in
energy
 fields, the ratio of petrol decreased notably by roughly 10% to 19.55%. Despite
dramatic
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 fall, it had just under a fifth of the total in 2005. Now turning to smaller
Energy
production
, Nuclear and others stood at 6,40% and 4,9% in turns in 1995. Both
production
 capacities were significant increase to 10,1 and 9,1 in 2005. The highest change by Other resources was by 5% in 2005 and they accounted for 9.5% of total
production
.
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