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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both attitudes and give your opinion.

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Many
people
 are willing to experience new features, for
instant
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, pay a visit to new places and try new types of food. Others ,
however
, like their lives to be steady and they rather do
things
 that are known to them. I personally hold the idea that it is a necessity for human beings to experience new
things
 and
this
 will eventually end up in evolving humans. On the one hand, some
people
 prefer to live the same every day and believe that their life can be controlled in
this
 way.
Moreover
, they do not want to risk what they have obtained by experiencing new
things
.
Nonetheless
, they are afraid of change and are not flexible.
For instance
, elder
people
 prefer their constant life in which everything is the same as it was yesterday, so they lack flexibility in their lives.
On the other hand
, many
people
 say that human being is an inquisitive
creature
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 and the tendency to try new
things
 is what has led to
its
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 thriving over centuries.
Furthermore
, trying new
things
 will prevent their lives from being dull and
also
 lead to
further
 wisdom and knowledge.
Moreover
, these new findings may change its path for good. Take
for
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,for
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 example, the continent of America was first discovered by
a
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 inquisitive person who was exploring the world for new opportunities. I believe it is in our instincts to be curious and we will get bored of doing the
things
 that we are familiar with,
although
 the risk might increase by experiencing new
things
,
however
, I think that it is necessary.
To sum up
, some
people
 may not try new
things
 because they want their usual life to be preserved and take no chance of risking it by trying new
things
.
However
, others believe that experiencing new
things
 is one of
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the humans
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humans
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 key features and
it
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is inborn,
Furthermore
, it may lead to finding new
things
 and places which were unbeknown to humans before, so it is mandatory to be inquisitive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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