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Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sports
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 of the most prevalent topics that people
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all
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 over the world. Different countries’ governments have different attitudes to
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specialized
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, some of them decide to spend most of the funding
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 building
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 and training top athletes, in order to improve
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international fame.
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others think that providing
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facilities
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 can be utilized by everyone will be a more positive way, which offers widespread
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 participation. On
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 hand, the supporters argue that the great training equipment for specialized
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 can improve the level of athletes’ performance. It can make athletes and the coach more concentrate on the training process, resulting in fostering more and more
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 sportsmen. There is no doubt that
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vigorous devotion
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 high-quality specialized
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 equipment can be a significant margin for winning
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international competitions.
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 of being positive, critics assert that
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 an approach disregards the rights of the general public to engage in
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. The majority
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 has been allocated
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 may result in limited opportunities for regular individuals to participate in
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, leading to health issues and social inequalities.
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facilities
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 are not
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 privilege for some talented
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 kind of exercise, which can improve people’s health and offer
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 happiness. It
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 social way
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 associating with others.
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, there still shortcoming exists.
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specialized
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 devices are expensive, the government needs to devote lots of money
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public
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, in order to make sure that fairness for people in different
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, which will cost a lot. In my view, both of them have advantages and disadvantages, and developing all kinds of
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 in terms of different situations counts.
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 can undoubtedly enhance a country's competitiveness in international
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, it is crucial to ensure equal sporting opportunities for the general public. A balanced and comprehensive investment
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 both aspects means a lot for the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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