IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You are a commuter. One morning on your way to work you suddenly fell ill and lost your consciousness. One gentleman on the same bus sent you to a hospital. Write a letter to the company where the gentleman works to extend your gratefulness. In your letter: - Introduce who you are, - Describe what happened, - Suggest how you would like to thank him.

#commuter #work #consciousness #gentleman #bus #company #works #gratefulness
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to the kind action your staff member, Mr Kim, the teller of your bank, did to me
last
Linking Words
 Monday. I am Maria Do, a full-time cashier at Walmart in Kingston. I live in Odessa, so I take the 611 bus to and from work on a daily basis.
Last
Linking Words
 Monday morning around 8.00, I was on the bus when my asthma came. I felt dizzy, hard to breathe and
then
Linking Words
 came to a full sleep. When I woke up, I saw myself in Hotel Dieu hospital, and the nurse told me that the man who wore your bank’s uniform sent me here. There had been a few passengers on the bus that morning including some women and that gentleman, so I remember him well. I had been able to see his name and title on his insignia before the accident. I am grateful to Mr Kim for his kindness. To show my gratitude, I enclose a Walmart gift card in the envelope and hope that you could transfer it to him. Thank you for your help. I am proud of your company for having
such
Linking Words
 a good employee. Yours faithfully, Maria Do
Submitted by mariatuyet82 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: