It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages?
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nowadays
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particularly
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for
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risk
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things
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risk
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time
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her
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their
time
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she
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they
her
children as her wish because of job demand and will Correct pronoun usage
their
lost
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lose
be lost
her
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their
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her
kids. Correct pronoun usage
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in
the weekend or Change preposition
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night after work. Correct article usage
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their
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got
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get
risk
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on
the office.
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risk
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instead
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the
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