It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages?

Since old, everything goes by considering the lowest consequences. Even
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is popular to manage the
risk
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in office lives. Every person has their
risk
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choosing the way they live. Personally,
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risk
is a basic
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in our life and have many advantages if we analyze
deeply
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,
such
as taking
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as a carrier
women
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and
also
being a leader in the office.
Firstly
, it is normal for society to have
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consequences
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their choice, every choices have a
risk
and a benefit at the same
time
.
For example
, carrier women have a
risk
on
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time
,
she
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can not meet
her
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children as her wish because of job demand and will
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her
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time
to educate
her
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kids.
However
, she will easily give a fund
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sufficient the needs of her family but still have
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quality
time
to chill with their family, even just
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the weekend or
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the
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night after work.
Thus
, every
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still have a benefit.
Secondly
, in
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professional lives, sometimes people choose to keep their position as a staff and have no idea
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being
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a leader
because
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lack of
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. If a person
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a
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brave to improve their carrier path,
hence
they will
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a profit from that like a big payment, wide relations, and good complimentary. Even they must take the
risk
to gain a big responsibility
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the office. To summarize, taking a
risk
have many advantages
instead
of
the
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disadvantages, community indeed to taking a
risk
by
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their choices. But, the adverb effect of taking a
risk
is always greater than the disadvantages,
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