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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the location of
two
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 different areas for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Look at from
Overall
Linking Words
, There are multiple (Five) keys joined by these
two
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locations
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, which are named S1, and S2. River, Road,
Railway
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, industrial
estate
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, city centre, housing
estate
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, Golf course and
the
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apply
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park is the main key factor of these
two
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locations
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, where
One
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 area S1 is indicated in the North direction.
According to
Linking Words
 the North position, the S1 location has been mentioned, exactly North direction built real
estate
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 building,
One
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 road passed through over the housing
estate
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 complex, which is 50% divided into
two
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locations
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, On the west side, In irregular green shape shown Golf course and park. Red is shown the city centre, which is middle of both
locations
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. The
Railway
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 line is connected to both
position
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positions
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 for travelling from
one
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 area to another location, In the S2 part, an industrial
estate
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 complex has been built, which is exactly near to the
Railway
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 track. The river is
also
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 preferred by individuals for shopping malls. The road has
one
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 little branch with is passed over the
railway
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 plates and near to industrial
estate
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 sections.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, locations, railway, estate, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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