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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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In today's advanced world, science and technology have helped improve all aspects of our
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 even in the field of agriculture. But even with so much advancement in agriculture, most
people
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 around the globe do not have enough
food
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.
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 and put forward several solutions to reduce
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 issue. The predominant factors resulting in
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 problem are inflation and ignorance of the
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 .
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, everything from clothes to
food
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 has become so costly that it is not easy for a big family to earn and spend a lot on
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.
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, the
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 does not care about the
people
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 who do not have money to buy
food
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.
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,
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 a survey posted in the Times newspaper, fifty-five per cent of
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 in India sleep empty stomach and the
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 shelters do not do anything about it.
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, there are potential solutions that have helped
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this
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 problem.
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, the
government
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 should put a check on the prices of
food
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. Any basic eatable item should not be sold for more than the MRP.
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, bread should not be sold for more than ten as it is a basic necessity.
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, those in charge of
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 shelters should prepare enough
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 for everyone in the shelter.
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 way nobody sleeps with
food
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.
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 steps can reduce the number of
people
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 who are still hungry. In conclusion,
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 and the
government
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's carelessness are the reasons why
people
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 are still hungry.
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, steps by the
government
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 can significantly help in reducing
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 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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