The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world.
The given bar graph gives data on the number of
people
living in urban
areas
in
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different continents of the
world
. The data are given for three different years, i.e. 1950, 2007 and projected for the year 2030. As is presented from the given data,
initially
in 1950, on
an
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average 29%
people
of
the
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in the
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world
lived in the urban area.
In
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this
year, the highest
percentage
of the
population
lived
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living
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in urban
areas
were
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in North America which was 64%. In Africa and Asia, these percentages were
lowest
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the lowest
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(15 and 17
percentage
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respectively). Half of the Europeans lived in urban
areas
while
this
percentage
was 42% in Latin America. After 57 years in 2007, the
percentage
of urban area
population
reached
to
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49% in the
world
. North America again had the highest
percentage
of the
population
who lived in urban
areas
. The lowest
percentage
was in Africa (37%) and in other continents, the percentages were around 40 to 70. The
percentage
of the
population
lived
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living
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in urban
areas
increased significantly in 2007 compared to the percentages
of
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in
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1950. It is projected that 60% of the
world
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population
would live in urban
areas
in the year 2030.
This
percentage
would be more than 80 in both of the American continents. In Europe,
this
would increase to 78 and both in Asia and Africa around half of their
population
would live in urban
areas
. In summary, the
percentage
of
people
lived
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living
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in urban
areas
increased over time and more and more
people
would be living in urban
areas
over time.
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