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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world
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The
bart
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bar
 chart above illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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 living in urban areas in different
conntinents
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continents
, in 1950, 2007 and its projection in 2050.
According to
 the data, in 1950, more than half of
population
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the population
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 in Europe (51%), North
America
 (64%), and
Ocenia
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Oceania
 (62%) already lived in town,
whereas
 in Africa and Asia, only 15% and 17% of its
residence
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 lived in the city. On the other
and
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hand
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, 42% of Latin
America
/
Carribean
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Caribbean
 inhibited urban regions for the same year.
This
 figure continued to rise in 2007, more than doubled for Africa and Asia, and almost half in Europe and Latin
America
/
Carribean
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Caribbean
 compared to the previous
periode
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period
. Meanwhile, in North
America
 and Oceania, the growth
only
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 15% and 9%, respectively. The percentage
projected
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is projected
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 to grow in 2050 in all continents, with
highest
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 proportion in Latin
America
/
Carribean
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Caribbean
 and North
America
, an accounted for 89% and 90% each, with growth
13
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% and 11%. In
this
periode
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period
, the highest increase
come
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 from Africa and Asia with
growth
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the growth
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 of 25% and 15% respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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