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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs. Discuss both view and give your own opinio

#people #visitors #countries #customs #opinio
I definitely agree with that view, it makes everything clear and easy for that certain country. The visitors follow the local customs than
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bring theirs. The
nation
 would not lose its identity because of travellers as they maintain their culture.
This
 is for the democracy to keep their
attractions
 for other visitors and for personality. Tourists visit different parts of the world to learn and gain knowledge about the local customs.
Therefore
 travellers are not there to change anything but to understand the way people live, and see the
attractions
 of that
nation
 ,
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 tourists learn more from our daily lives, our cultural history and many other skills we have as a
nation
. For ,instance they learn about different diets and foods for that community. How it is grown, manufactured and produced ,
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 the tourists have opinions on what they observe by committing that might help us grow especially when they give positive feedback.
Due to
 positive ,comments we got to grow and have more people who want to visit our sites. In ,
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 I greatly agree that our travellers must follow the community customs because they were attracted by that for them to change it people will lose their attraction and their values ,
however
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 if we allow change
then
 they would be no more
attractions
. The
nation
 will be just as nothing different to other countries. We would not have any
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attractions
.
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