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"Loneliness is an increasing problem in many societies, especially among the elderly. Why is this? How might it be remedied?"

#loneliness #societies
There are many reasons for cracking between
relationships
 that make us feel lonely, especially in the elderly. The cause comes from many sides, possibly
due to
 humans, maybe
due to
 time,
even
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and even
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 because the earth is too developed.
the
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first,
old
people
 must deal with old age diseases,
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and dealth
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dealth
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death
, so that make
elderly
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the elderly
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 lose around
people
 .
For example
, someone loses a husband, wife or a very close friend. The
relationships
 will decrease over time.
Besides
 social development is too fast. Making
people
 slow like the elderly from society,
this
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also
 proves that the elderly can hardly have new
relationships
 after losing other
relationships
.
The
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Second
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second,
The elderly and their children
are
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also
 difficult to make friends because the thought distance between generations is huge. Young
people
 always like things quickly, bustling and exciting,
color
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colour
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.Those things can be overcome by increasing communication and exchange of
people
.
For example
, children often call Haoowjc to visit their parents and older
people
 should often go out to play,
make
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and make
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 more friends of the same age. And the elderly always
tends
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 to like simple things,
Finally
, the key to loneliness is that there is no communication between humans and can change it by sociable society and friends, often talking to relatives.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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