Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health process as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?
In today's busy
life
a major part of employees Add a comma
,life
spend
little Change the verb form
spends
time
on sports
activities. They have no time
and energy during working they
, but Correct pronoun usage
apply
at
their leisure Change preposition
in
time
there are some more important things to do. Add a comma
,time
As a result
, some diseases will appear in the future. In this
essay, I will describe the causes of this
issue and measures that could be done to resolve it.
To begin
with, the population doesn't pay much attention to having sports
exercises regularly . One of the reasons why that happen is a leak of information about consequences . Individuals can't realise that a sedentary lifestyle may cause very important health problems . For instance
, obesity, heart disease, diabetes, some
types of cancer. Correct word choice
and some
Secondly
, it is hard to find time
for sports
working 40 or more hours a week. More important things, such
as housework have to be done. Also
,because of people
's nature
it is hard to motivate themselves, they need support , Add a comma
,nature
for
example
training in groups, but that kind of Add a comma
,example
trainings
is quite expensive.
So,both government and employers should take measures to deal with that issue. Change the wording
training
pieces of training
Firstly
, government
should think about how to Add an article
the government
explain
Add the preposition
toexplain
people
how important active
lifestyle is. Correct article usage
an active
For example
, books for children or social advertisements for adults. Also
, employers should offer more flexible working hours . Furthermore
, they can organise some sports
activities at work to motivate their workers. Besides
, city administration can organise free trainings
for different Change the wording
training
pieces of training
people
. For instance
, in my hometown Jurmala in the summer there are some free trainings for all city dwellers on the beach.
To conclude
, an active lifestyle is very important for our health , but individuals don't think about that . They have too busy life , so some measures have to be done to motivate people
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