Some people think cars are the best way to get around a city, while others prefer cycling. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Actually,life is beautiful with its opportunities.But sometimes
people
don'tt
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don't
won't
be happy in different situations and it makes their life stressful and they met
difficulties
in solving their problems In my opinion,we have a lot of ways of escaping weight and
difficulties
.
For example
,some population find a hobby,like reading with lovely things etc.It's a variety of
people
,
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and changes in taste.Some
people
escape their
stress
by reading
an interesting and advanced books
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,because when they read they learn something ,or they fool like the main hero of the story.It can be feeling happy.Other
people
like
an
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extreme sport,because extreme sport is more adrenaline.Adrenalin is chemical content and it helps for producing serotonin,that why
people
with serotonin being happy and
stress
left their bodies. What about
difficulties
could be
like
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low in crime money, family relations from a study perspective or some
people
can'
t
find a dream job
and
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etc
.
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When
people
have low income they can'
t
buy whatever they want.They can'
t
travel as
normally
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and in quality.For escaping through
difficulties
community must work more, and find a second job.In other
situation
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,in family relations men or women can'
t
understand each other or children
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towants
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wants
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towards
see their parents as they want ,but
people
are different ,nobody
towants
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wants
be
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like other wants. Some
people
reduce their
stress
and
difficult
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with wearing in their gardens.Flowers,trees,
birds
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and birds
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, is keeping
people
silent,feel
itself
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as
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babies,
liquidate
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and liquidate
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the
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stress
. In conclusion,l would say that:if you have
stress
and
difficulties
nobody can'
t
help you as you .You stopped it in your brain.The brain must accept all as it has ,
the
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people
can win on
stress
and find ways for solving their problems,because at that time all the
difficulties
seem obvious
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