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Some people think cars are the best way to get around a city, while others prefer cycling. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #cars #city
Actually,life is beautiful with its opportunities.But sometimes
people
don'tt
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don't
won't
 be happy in different situations and it makes their life stressful and they met
difficulties
 in solving their problems In my opinion,we have a lot of ways of escaping weight and
difficulties
.
For example
,some population find a hobby,like reading with lovely things etc.It's a variety of
people
,
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 and changes in taste.Some
people
 escape their
stress
 by reading
an interesting and advanced books
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interesting and advanced books
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,because when they read they learn something ,or they fool like the main hero of the story.It can be feeling happy.Other
people
 like
an
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extreme sport,because extreme sport is more adrenaline.Adrenalin is chemical content and it helps for producing serotonin,that why
people
 with serotonin being happy and
stress
 left their bodies. What about
difficulties
 could be
like
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low in crime money, family relations from a study perspective or some
people
 can'
t
 find a dream job
and
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etc
.
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When
people
 have low income they can'
t
 buy whatever they want.They can'
t
 travel as
normally
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 and in quality.For escaping through
difficulties
 community must work more, and find a second job.In other
situation
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,in family relations men or women can'
t
 understand each other or children
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towants
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wants
to wants
towards
 see their parents as they want ,but
people
 are different ,nobody
towants
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wants
be
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 like other wants. Some
people
 reduce their
stress
 and
difficult
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 with wearing in their gardens.Flowers,trees,
birds
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and birds
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, is keeping
people
 silent,feel
itself
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as
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like
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 babies,
liquidate
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and liquidate
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the
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stress
. In conclusion,l would say that:if you have
stress
 and
difficulties
 nobody can'
t
 help you as you .You stopped it in your brain.The brain must accept all as it has ,
the
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people
 can win on
stress
 and find ways for solving their problems,because at that time all the
difficulties
 seem obvious
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