Some people think movies should only be for entertainment. Others think that they should also have educational values. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Movies

have been a significant source of entertainment for individuals all around the world.

However

, there is

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increasing manoeuvre, considering whether

movies

ought to only be for entertainment or whether they have educational roles. In

this

essay, I will discuss both views and give my personal opinion. On the one hand,

movies

may be merely for entertainment not only for children

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but

also

parents.

This

is because

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movies

provide an escape from situations based on reality and allow commuters who travel to work on a daily basis to relax after the hard work day.

Furthermore

, if some children do not have ample opportunities to carry out a lot of leisure time activities,

movies

have the ability to give pleasure.

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the global pandemic, many offspring

had

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not

carried

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out entertaining activities, at that time

movies

might have helped prevent boredom.

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provided that all

movies

vanished tomorrow, the only consequence would be that people would need to find another activity to fill the time.

On the other hand

, I agree with those who think that

movies

have an adverse impact on increasing psychological and educational benefits for society.

That is

mainly because,

movies

can spread awareness about social issues, namely poverty, racism and climate change. They can teach science and history and

also

literature in

entertaining

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an entertaining

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mode that captures people's attention. An example of

this

is that

biopic

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can be used to educate citizens about the lives of great personalities

such

as Nelson Mandela or Abraham Lincoln. In conclusion,

while

some people think that

movies

should only serve as a form of

entertaining

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other

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others

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consider that they should

also

provide educational

values

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However

, I believe that

movies

have a role in not only education

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but

also

psychology.

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task response

Your essay presents a clear discussion of both views and provides a personal opinion. However, make sure to fully elaborate on the given topic and include supporting examples for a more complete response.

coherence cohesion

Your essay demonstrates a generally logical structure and coherent progression of ideas. Ensure that your introduction and conclusion fully address the topic and its significance, and consider using clear transitions between your main points for improved cohesion.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

290 words

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