The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
The proposed changes that will be introduced to the industrial area of Norbiton are shown on the map. The ring road
that is
located in the
center
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of the area will be extended by two additional branches. One branch will extend to the
north-west
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, and the other will follow across a river.
Moreover
, an extra road ring will be built to the south of the first ring. Dramatic changes would be done to the existing facilities. All factories would be demolished, freeing the space for
construction
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of housing buildings.
Furthermore
, along the roads a shop, medical center, playground, and school would be erected.
Additionally
,
at
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the north,
a
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farmland would be reduced in size to make
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way for a large housing
building
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buildings
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.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the principal changes that are planned
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the designated area are the expansion of the existing
road ways
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, the destruction of factory facilities, and the construction of housing buildings accompanied
with
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educational, recreational, and medical buildings.
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