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The current trend in education is to move away from traditional exams and instead have continuous assessment over the school year. What do you think of this trend?

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Education systems are constantly evolving day by day. Nowadays, rather than giving traditional exams to the
students
 more and more are joining in the latest trends which is the continuous assessments. In my opinion,
this
 has a positive impact because they will be able to acquire knowledge and skills without stressing over
examinations
. The current trend has the advantage of having consistent learning without the constant pressure of
examinations
 that
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 before
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 the semester. In which the
students
 are capable of improving their abilities and filling in their deficiencies by taking more assessments provided that they are guided by the teaching staff.
Instead
 of having to base the improvement of the
students
 on major
examinations
, these quizzes, assignments, or projects will be the basis of how they progress in their subjects.
For example
, my teacher in high school
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 me quizzes and assignments to work on in order to improve my physics class since I had a hard time understanding the subject. Another thing would be,
it
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 eliminates stress on their psychological and mental health.
This
 is because children have vulnerable mental states and
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this
 could lead to trauma during
examinations
.
This
 constant pressure might even
further
 delay their development because of their fear of failure which should be seen as a hindrance. Children are not like adults who
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 personal and professional lives, so lessening the stress of school should be encouraged. A good example is Finland because their education system has
this
 kind of approach wherein they are hands-on with the individual progression of each student. Despite the short time that the
students
 spent at their school, their success rates were comparable to those of
students
 in East Asian countries. In conclusion, I believe
this
 current trend is good because it reduces the pressure on the
students
 able to focus solely on the developments.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • current trend
  • traditional exams
  • continuous assessment
  • school year
  • deeper understanding
  • ongoing feedback
  • improvement
  • pressure
  • stress
  • real-life situations
  • continuous learning
  • evaluation
  • abilities
  • progress
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