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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world today. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is replacing fossil fuels. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, it is undeniable that non-renewable
energy
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 as gas and coal are the most used
sources
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 of
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 because they play a vital role in economic development,
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 in a few countries, the government has started to use solar and wind to replace fossil fuels. Personally, I think
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 a positive decision that the government can take to make the world a better place.
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 there is a benefit to the country from using coal or gas as the main source, there are
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 negative impacts on the environment.
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, waste from the production process of non-renewable
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 can cause soil and water environmental pollution.
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, if the waste is disposed of in lakes or seas, it will reduce oxygen in the water and can cause bottom-dwelling ecosystems in the form of fish, shrimp, crabs, or other animals to die.
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, The use of fossil fuels can
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 increase the adverse effects
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 global warming where the earth will feel twice as hot as in previous years.
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, ice melting can occur which can submerge the island and abrasion the coast.
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, I believe that the government should replace the
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sources
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 to avoid more serious environmental damage, it is because alternative
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 of
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 are very environmentally friendly and do not produce waste and pollution which
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 damaging the environment is
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 harmful to human health. They can
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 always be used without worrying that the supply will run out. In conclusion, despite using fossil
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, which can harm the environment, I believe that other types of
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 are safer and more advantageous.
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