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Some experts that is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of that outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience

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specialists think that
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 because it is good for their knowledge. The essay will discuss some of the
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 and cons of learning a foreign
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 at primary school rather than secondary school and provide relevant examples. On the one hand, experts say that
children
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 ought to study foreign
languages
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 early
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, if
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 begin to learn at primary school it helps them to remember deeply.
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 they can speak new
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language
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 fluently.
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,
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countries are taught different
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kindergartens in order to remember new words easily. Indeed,
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 learn much more foreign
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 than adolescents. On the other hand, there are some negative aspects of learning early
age
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children
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. They prefer to play with toys and different things to learn
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due to
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 of some serious issues.
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, when young
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, they are not interested in learning
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foreign
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specialists believe that it is
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 when
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 are very young.
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 there are some
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 and
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drawbacks
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 aspects of learning
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foreign
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relevant examples.

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