Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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born with bad condition
prepared
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are prepared
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better than rich.
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agree
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with that statement because
children
with not the best condition have to face
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problems sooner than other
children
and they will see that
they
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parents
are struggling with money and they would like to fix it.
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,
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sooner
people will face
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a problem
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problem
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,
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sooner
they will find a solution.
Children
who
was
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witnessed
of
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so many
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will not be the same as they used to
.
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Because he/she will see how
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young age.
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, they will do many mistakes and learn
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them. 
In addition
,
children
will see their
parents
how they are short of budget and they will try to
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charge
it.
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of
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children
/teenagers would not like to see how their
parents
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suffer from money.
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Therefore
, they will work hard and
children
would
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not
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like to see it again.
Moreover
, they will retire their
parents
from their job and provide
them
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for them
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.
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,
the
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most
parents
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taking
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night shifts in order to provide
their
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children
.
Therefore
,
children
will work hard to prevent
this
. In conclusion,
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essay believes that
children
who
was
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born with
poor
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condition will be prepared for
adult`s
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life better than
wealty
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wealthy
children
. Because they will see how their
parents
are struggling with money.
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Furthermore
, they will face
with
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issue
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much
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sooner
.
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