The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given map illustrates two possible locations for the planned supermarket (S1 and S2) in the town of Garlsdon.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that S2 is located Linking Words
on
the city centre, Change preposition
in
while
S1 is sited Linking Words
on
the Change preposition
in
coutryside
. Correct your spelling
countryside
Moreover
, both Linking Words
of
supermarkets can be accessed by a railway, and only S1 can be accessed by main roads.
Change preposition
apply
To begin
with, the total population of Garlsdon is 65,000 Linking Words
where
Correct word choice
which
this
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twon
Correct your spelling
town
two
surrounded
by the towns of Hindon, Bransdon, and Cransdon. S2 is planned to construct in the city centre where Add a missing verb
is surrounded
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this
is surrounded by industrial places. To the north and South of the industrial sites, there are residential areas. People who live in the South is easier to visit S2 and the potential visitors Correct pronoun usage
which
of
Change preposition
to
the
S2 is higher because 15,000 and 29,000 people from Bandson and Crandsdon live near S2 rather than S1.
Correct article usage
apply
In contrast
, people who live in the north are closer to S1, and only 10,000 population live near Linking Words
the
S1, Correct article usage
apply
Consequently
, the potential market is lower than S2. Linking Words
However
, there are two accesses to reach S1 which Linking Words
is
through a railway and main roads. Meanwhile, S2 is just accessed by trains. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Ones
who want to visit S2 is Correct pronoun usage
Those
also
should pass the industrial area before reaching S2.Linking Words
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