Nowadays many people have access to computers on a regular basis and are large number of children play computer games

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games
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an important role in the life of the population. In my
opinion
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this
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because of
a
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online study and vitally by interesting and solution lie in
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many
book
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and take
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. It is undeniable that there are some serious reasons
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computer
games
in terms of
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online and fun
games
. Regarding the farmer many parents
to
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buy a
computer
for
his
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childrens
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. And
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generation there
are
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getting used to it and whether they are poisoning
children
's minds. The other major point of to be interested in the game he is playing.
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Tom, Angela Run Make-up and others.
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also
a playing
a
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computer
games
but not much The several actions that could be taken to solve the problems described above.
The
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computer
games
can have a bad effect on their future. The light emitted from the
computer
has a greater negative effect on
children
than people think.
Firstly
a simple solution would be
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many
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book
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.
Children
should read more books are Harry Potter Titanic and Spider-Man.
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parents
also
have an important part to play. Encourage their
children
to take up healthy hobbies, outdoor activities and sports.
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would have a positive effect on
children
's physical and mental health
as well as
improve their social skills. In
conclusion
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although
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games
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a serious issue in the developed world if the above steps are taken the situation will surely improve in the coming years
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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