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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table compares two different cities, namely
London
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 and
Sydney
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, in terms of
temperature
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 level and the length of
daylight
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 in the
last
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 three days in
December
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 2018. It is evident from the table that
Sydney
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 experienced a higher
temperature
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 than
London
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 during the period shown.
On the other hand
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, the length of
daylight
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 in
Sydney
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 was longer than in
London
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.
London
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 had the lowest
temperature
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 at the outset, 9
°C
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 at maximum and 4
°C
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 at minimum.
In contrast
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, the highest
temperature
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 in
Sydney
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 was recorded at 26
°C
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, and the minimum level witnessed at 17
°C
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. The maximum heat in
London
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 slightly increased on the 29th of
December
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 at 29
°C
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 and
then
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 dropped to 10
°C
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 the next day. In comparison,
Sydney
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 showed an incline trend in its
temperature
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. The maximum
temperature
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 on 29th and 30th was 28
°C
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 and 31
°C
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, respectively. Looking at the duration of
daylight
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, the UK surpassed 7
hours
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 on the 28th of
December
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,
while
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 the
daylight
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 length in
Sydney
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 was below 15
hours
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. The duration of
daylight
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 in
Sydney
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 was levelling out at 15
hours
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 on the 28th, 29th, and 30th of
December
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.
However
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, the UK
also
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 had the same duration of
daylight
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 over the period shown: each was 7
hours
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, temperature, daylight, december, °c, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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