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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Changes of international travel

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Changes of international travel
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The given table data gives information about
the
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international
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travelers
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 in 5 different areas in 4 different years. As is observed from the given data, the
number
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 of international
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travelers
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travellers
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 increased over the period and Europe was their favourite destination for travelling.
According to
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 the presented table, around 450
million
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 international
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travelers
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travellers
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 visited different parts of the world
initially
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 in 1990 and
this
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number
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 gradually increased and reached
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around 700
million
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 in 2005. Europe received the largest
number
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 of
such
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tourists
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 which was more than 50% of total
travelers
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. In 1990, more than 280
million
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tourists
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 out of
total
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a total
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448.9
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of 448.9
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million
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 travelled
European
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the European
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 continents alone and
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number
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 reached
to
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over 400
million
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 in 2005 when
total
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the total
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 international
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travelers
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travellers
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 were about 693
million
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. America and Asia and the Pacific regions were another two favoured tourist destinations among international
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travelers
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travellers
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 and in 1990 they received about 80 and 602
million
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tourists
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 respectively. After 15 years the
number
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 of international
travelers
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 in
Asia
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the Asia
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 region increased to 135.8
million
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 which was higher than that of America. Africa received around 18.2
million
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 international
travelers
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 in 1990 and it increased to 28.7
million
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 in 2005.
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Finally
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 the least
number
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 of international
tourists
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 visited
Middle
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the Middle
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 East region starting from 8.9
million
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 in 1990 and reaching
at
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15.8
million
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 in 2005.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words travelers, number, million, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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