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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 how many international
tourist
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tourists
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 in 5 districts between 1990 to 2005. As
observe
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observed
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 in
given
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 data, the
number
 of
people
 who went
to
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on
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 international travel
were
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increased and Europe was the most popular place to
visited
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visit
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. In 1990, around 450
million
people
were
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travel
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travelled
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 to different districts and the
number
were
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increased until become 700
million
people
 in 2005. Europe was the most popular destination for tourism with more than 280
million
people
 were visited there in 1990 and the
number
were
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increased every year until
in
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2005 there were approximately 400
million
tourist
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tourists
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. America and Asia and the
pasific
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Pacific
 were the second hot place to visit with 80
million
 and 60
million
 respectively in 1990 and
this
number
were
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rose steadily. In
Middle
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the Middle
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 East and Africa, almost 10
million
 and 20
million
people
 went there and
still
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this still
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 increase
with
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to
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arouns
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around
 16
million
 and 30
million
people
 two
decade
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decades
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 later.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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