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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The graphs
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the changes
of
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in
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 destinations in three different place in
European
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a European
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 country
bertween
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between
 1987 and 2007.
Overall
, the number of visitors in all places
were
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apply
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increased in 2007 compared to
in
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apply
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1987 and there
were
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was
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a fluctiave
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fluctiave
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fluctuate
 graph in those
years
. The cost was the most popular place to
visit
 in those
years
 of
survey
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a survey
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 which around 40
thousands
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thousand
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people
 visited in 1987.
However
, in 1992, there was a slope with around 35
thousands
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thousand
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people
 but after those
years
, the number
were
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was
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increase
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increased
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 until
double
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doubled
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 in 2007.
On the other hand
,
mountains
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the mountains
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is
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are
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 the least
favorite
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favourite
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 place to
visit
 with only 20
thousands
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thousand
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people
went
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going
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 there and rose
up
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apply
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steadily to 35
thousands
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thousand
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 twenty
years
 later. As
describe
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described
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 in the given chart, less than 10
thousands
 tourist
were
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apply
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visit
 lakes in 1987 and the number
was
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apply
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increased until reached its
peaked
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peak
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 in 2002 which was more than 75
thousands
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thousand
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. Though, 5
years
 later the total tourist were fall
with
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to
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 50
thousands
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thousand
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people
 who
visit
 lakes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, visit, thousands, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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