the charts below show the males and females arrested over 5 years and the reasons for the most recent arresets.

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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of people arrested between men and women over 5 years,

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the bar graph depicts the proportion of actual reasons for being arrested.

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, the pie charts show the number of boys arrested was more than that of girls;

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, in terms of reasons, the percentage of girls was higher than that of males.

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with, the charts show that there were double of arrested males than that not arrested, which was 68%.

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, the number of arrested females was much higher than that of not arrested with 91%,

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being not arrested was just 9%.

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, regarding the reasons, public drinking was the highest with about 37% for females and over 30 %.

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this

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, there was more than 27%

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drunk driving men, totally opposite with the number of women, just under 15%.

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, no answer was the least reason for both genders being arrested, which was only 7% for girls and under 5% for fathers.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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167 words

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the charts below show the males and females arrested over 5 years and the reasons for the most recent arresets.

PERSONAL INFORMATION These days more people put their personal information, such as names, addresses and telephone numbers, online for everyday activities such as socialising on social networks or banking purposes. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favour.

In many countries, the gap between the rich and poor is widening. What problems can this cause, and what solutions can you suggest?

Some people believe that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crimes. Others believe that it is not morally correct to kill criminals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.