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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the rate of carbon dioxide
emissions
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 by each person in four different counties in a 40-year
period
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 . The units are measured in metric
tonnes
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. At the onset,
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 the average carbon dioxide
emissions
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 in the UK and Sweden decreased over the
period
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,
while
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 in Italy and Portugal, it had an upward trend. The highest
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 were in the United Kingdom. Regarding the UK, it had a steady decline at the beginning of the
period
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 with just over 10 metric
tonnes
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 until it reached 8 metric
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 in the
last
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 year of the
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.
Likewise
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, by 1977, the
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 in Sweden went up from almost 9 to over 10 metric
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, before oscillating until the end of the
period
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 with roughly 5 metric
tonnes
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 of
emissions
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 per person.
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, the CO2
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 in Itlay
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 started at around 4 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967 before climbing slightly to over 6 metric
tonnes
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 ten years later after which it palpitated in 2007 at nearly 8 metric
tonnes
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. In the case of Portugal, it had the lowest
emissions
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 throughout with only 1 metric tonne in 1969, before rising gradually until it reached approximately 5 metric
tonnes
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 in the final year.
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