Many Manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which cause many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Agree or disagree?

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One of the reasons for health problems nowadays, is the high
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of
sugar
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included in many manufactured
food
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and drink
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. Some people suggest increasing the price of sugary
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to decrease consumption. In my opinion,
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action will not help to solve the problem, it may decrease the consumption a little but will not solve it. High
sugar
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levels
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are included in many
products
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that we consume nearly every day. These high
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cause many diseases like diabetes, heart disease and tooth problems. Nowadays, it is ordinary to find a child less than 10 years old and some of his/ her teeth are black.
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, the number of diabetics increases
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the youth more than in the past.
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the changes in life habits and the fast pace style that we are living have a huge impact on our
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choices. Now, we prefer to buy
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from supermarkets more than from farms or farmers' markets.
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, these kinds of
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contain a large number of preservers and high
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of
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. Raising awareness is the solution.
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, decreasing the demand for manufactured
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that contain high
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of
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should come
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of the awareness and knowledge of how these types of foods and drinks damage our bodies. Health care could be a subject that children study in school to encourage them to follow a healthy lifestyle.
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, to learn how to preserve their body from the damage of fast
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and supermarket
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, making sugary
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more expensive is not the solution.
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, raising awareness and developing knowledge is the path to a healthier generation.
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increasing the choices of healthier
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in the supermarket may share in lowering the consequences
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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