some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that could be better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree with this view?

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The
art
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is creativity of our mind, significant number of individuals think that the
government
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is wasting fund on the arts
whereas
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other peoples believe that
government
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need to spend
money
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on other service
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as
healthcare
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the healthcare
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and
education
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sector
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. I partially concur with
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statement.
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essay will
demontsrates
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demonstrate
demonstrates
both
view
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views
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. On the one side,
Art
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have
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has
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always influenced culture to flourish, and it is an important part of development throughout the
histrory
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history
of
man kind
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mankind
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. Authorities of different countries have always tried to invest half
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money
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the money
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on
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in
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art
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as Painting, Dance, Music, sculpture and so on. If
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traditional and
culture
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cultural
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art
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gets famous worldwide
then
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it is obvious that people from all around the world will come to experience them in our country which will be
largly
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largely
benificial
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beneficial
for the nation.
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, when
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government
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the government
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of
india
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India
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started
bulding
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building
the "
statue
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of
unity
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Unity
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",
it
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apply
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was oppose
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was opposed
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by
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many individuals,
thet
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that
then
it would be not
benificial
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beneficial
for investing 500 million
money
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on
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in
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this
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sculpture, after the
completition
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completion
of
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the stutue
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stutue
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statue
, it recovered in just 3 years by tourist which is made great advantages. Another example of the
government
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investment in arts being extremely fruitful is the advancement of
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city in the United Arab Emirates, 50 years ago there
were
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was
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only barren land of the desert after
creation
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the creation
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of
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the infrasture
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infrasture
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fracture
made world shopping mall, which
is
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also gets
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also
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get
greatly
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profit on their investment. On the other side,
Government
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also
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should invest
money
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on
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in
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education
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, health, road,
infrastructure
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and infrastructure
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, but all of
them
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the
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most important
are
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is
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healthcare
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the healthcare
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and
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the educatiion
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educatiion
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education
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sector
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, all
contries
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contry's
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first priority is well
beign
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being
. Authorities provide the scheme on
health
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the health
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sector
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and
education
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sector
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,
such
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as
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investing
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half
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money
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the money
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and
get
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getting
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large
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a large
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benifit
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benefit
benefits
,
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, they need to provide free sessions, equipment for exercise, and for
education
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provide free material for study, so it would
be
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greatly affect
on
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apply
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development. To be concluded, both parts are important for
peoples
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people
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, so
government
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should spend
fund
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funds
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on
art
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as well
other
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as other
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facilities,
Art
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has
own
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its own
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importance
wheres
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whereas
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other services
is
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apply
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also
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need work for
development
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the development
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of countries.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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