some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that could be better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree with this view?

The
art
is creativity of our mind, significant number of individuals think that the
government
is wasting fund on the arts
whereas
other peoples believe that
government
need to spend
money
on other service
such
as
healthcare
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and
education
sector
. I partially concur with
this
statement.
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demonstrates
both
view
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views
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. On the one side,
Art
have
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always influenced culture to flourish, and it is an important part of development throughout the
histrory
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history
of
man kind
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mankind
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. Authorities of different countries have always tried to invest half
money
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the money
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on
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in
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art
such
as Painting, Dance, Music, sculpture and so on. If
the
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traditional and
culture
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art
gets famous worldwide
then
it is obvious that people from all around the world will come to experience them in our country which will be
largly
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largely
benificial
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beneficial
for the nation.
For instance
, when
government
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of
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started
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building
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of
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it
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was oppose
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by
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many individuals,
thet
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that
then
it would be not
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beneficial
for investing 500 million
money
on
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in
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this
sculpture, after the
completition
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completion
of
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statue
, it recovered in just 3 years by tourist which is made great advantages. Another example of the
government
investment in arts being extremely fruitful is the advancement of
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city in the United Arab Emirates, 50 years ago there
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only barren land of the desert after
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of
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infrasture
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fracture
made world shopping mall, which
is
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also
get
greatly
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profit on their investment. On the other side,
Government
also
should invest
money
on
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in
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education
, health, road,
infrastructure
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and infrastructure
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, but all of
them
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most important
are
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healthcare
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the healthcare
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and
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educatiion
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education
sector
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, all
contries
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contry's
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first priority is well
beign
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being
. Authorities provide the scheme on
health
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the health
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sector
and
education
sector
,
such
as
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investing
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half
money
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the money
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and
get
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getting
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large
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benifit
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benefit
benefits
,
Furthermore
, they need to provide free sessions, equipment for exercise, and for
education
provide free material for study, so it would
be
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greatly affect
on
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development. To be concluded, both parts are important for
peoples
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people
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, so
government
should spend
fund
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funds
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on
art
as well
other
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as other
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facilities,
Art
has
own
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its own
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importance
wheres
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whereas
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other services
is
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also
need work for
development
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the development
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of countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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