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In many country, povrty is the big problem. What is couse for this. And what we can do solve this problem

#country #povrty #couse
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Nowadays poorness is becoming
the
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 major problem in
come
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some
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 countries. In my
view
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this
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 is
largely
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 because of
overpopulation
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 and
averspending
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overspending
 on national
customes
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customers
customs
customer
 and the best solutions lie in
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decrease
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a decrease
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 of
migrants
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 and
organize
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organising
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measure
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measures
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 for overspending. It is undeniable that there are some
seriouse
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serious
 reasons
to
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 poverty in terms of
overpopulation
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 and excessive spending for
customes
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customers
customer
. Regarding the former
overpopulation
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 is increasingly
rise
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 among many
cauntries
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countries
.
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 is because the number of
migrants
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 saw a sharp increase in many countries. It can lead to
shortage
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a shortage
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 of
accomadations
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accommodations
accommodation
 and
rise
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a rise
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 in
price
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the price
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 of living.
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addition
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,addition
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 people suffer from living
in
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an
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expencive
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expensive
 life. The other major point of the poorness is
that
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overspending in national charges.
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 is because excessive spending is becoming
requirement
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a requirement
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 of life.
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result
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indivuduals
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individuals
 compete with each
others
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other
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 for spending better rather than
other
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others
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.
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 it causes for
be
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improvished
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improvised
impoverished
 of population. The several actions that could
be take
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be taken
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 to solve the problems described above.
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 a simple solution would be
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decrease
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to decrease
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 the number of
migrants
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. The reason why
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decrease
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the decrease
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of
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in
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migrations
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migration
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cause
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causes
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 of disappear poverty is that freedom of living increases. It can lead to
reduse
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reduce
reduced
 difficulties in
accomadation
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accommodation
. The other solution for
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 topic is
organize
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to organize
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measures
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for
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apply
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against
to
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apply
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overspending.
This
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 is because
measures
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 can prevent all
kind
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kinds
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 of improvidence . If
measures
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 are done people spend their money
for
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on
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 useful
customes
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customs
. They may organize
financial
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a financial
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 base in order to
decrease
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 poverty. In summary, the root cause of misery is
overpopulation
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 and unnecessary extra charge and
this
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 issue keeps giving
a
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birth to circulate globally as long as
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decrease
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a decrease
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 of
migrants
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 and organize
measures
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 for overspending are not taken.
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