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Some people say that the government should spend money on measures to save languages that are used by few speakers, while others believe that it is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Most
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 have fewer speakers.
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, it continues to be controversial
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 the governing body should financially help to salvage their extinction.
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 there are valid points to both views, I am of the opinion that
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 of economic resources, as I will discuss in
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 essay. On the one hand, those who support the idea of spending a country's revenue on tongues with the least native speakers point out that money is the driver of the dialects' popularity.
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 schools may need to be built and
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 pedagogics may need to be employed in these institutions to teach both foreign and local individuals.
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, the French
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 gained more popularity in the twenty-first century
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 federations' intervention by establishing training centres in every community and
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 inculcating them in school curriculums. To achieve
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, a large sum of money that private individuals cannot afford will be spent.
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, there is the claim that most tribes' cultures and ways of life vanish alongside their
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.
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, every financial help required from ministries globally must be rendered to curb
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 phenomenon.
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, supporters of
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 idea being a waste of resources often say that there are more pressing matters affecting human lives,
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, global warming, environmental pollution, insecurity and inflation amongst others. These are termed to be more catastrophic for men and the earth than
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 survival.
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, financial measures must be implemented more in these areas so as to make the globe a safe haven for every individual. As a
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 point, it may
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 be true that the larger proportion of dialects have no positive effect in the world unlike the few generally accepted speeches like the English and French
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. These less known lingo are neither used in the international market nor in the global relation. So, salvaging their death is probably of less importance to the world at large. Conclusively, there are both positive sides to expenditures on saving some
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 and making expenses on other prevalent occurrences.
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, I stand with the former supporters as there are life-threatening situations occurring around us that need the limited help the leaders can render money-wise.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the ideas are logically organized and linked together, providing a clear and cohesive essay structure. Use transition words and phrases to create coherence and cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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