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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is certainly true that today stars of sports earn a huge amount of money compared to other
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 who
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 in crucial positions
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 as doctors, nurses, and
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. Some individuals think star athletes are worth earning a great deal of salary, and others believe
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. In my opinion, the
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 who
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 in vital services namely, medical
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, and
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 should have higher salaries than star sportsmen. On the one hand, some members of society hold the idea that professional athletes merit earning a huge income. They believe those successful sportsmen can contribute to the prosperity of the economy of the country.
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, many
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 attend World Cup competitions in order to watch football players.
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, those
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 spend considerable money on hotels, public transport, and fees for tickets for matches, which
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 create thousands of jobs for local
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 in playgrounds, hotels, and airports.
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, I totally agree with those individuals who believe that professionals who
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 in vital places are worth a huge salary more than successful athletes. Medical
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 as doctors, and nurses play a key role to fight diseases and help
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 to stay healthy.
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, when Covid-19 started medical
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work
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 every single day to look after patients and provide advice to prevent the spread of the virus.
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,
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 play a significant role to shape the future of millions of students around the world through teaching children ethics and morals and increasing their knowledge of children about a wide range of subjects. In conclusion, In my perspective, the professionals like, medical
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, and
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 should give top wages than professional sports, because they provide valuable services to the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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