The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004
The bananas
price
in Japan, France, Germany, and the USA from 1994 to 2004
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by the picture, accounted
per
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kilogram
with
USD
currency. At
the
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first glance, Japan had the highest
price
almost in all
periode
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periods
.
On the other hand
, bananas in the USA was the cheapest
almost
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in
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all period as well. The cost of
Banana
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Bananas
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in Japan reached
the
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peak in 1995
with
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at
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roughly 3
USD
per
kilogram
. In the next year, the
price
went down to approximately 2
USD
per
kilogram
until 2000. Banana
price
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prices
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fell again in the next year until 1.70
USD
per
kilogram
,
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but rose progressively in the following period. In the
last
written year, the cost was
pricesily
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precisely
2.50
USD
per
kilogram
.
In addition
, the lowest banana cost was in the USA in 1994 which
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than 1
USD
per
kilogram
.
This
price
suddenly rose in 1995 and fluctuated until 1999. After 1999, the data stabled
in
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at
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around 1,10
USD
per
kilogram
in
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for
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the rest of time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, kilogram, usd with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • price fluctuation
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant rise/drop
  • trend
  • noticeable
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • highest
  • lowest
  • throughout the period
  • stable
  • volatile
  • potential reasons
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