Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
fast modern life, there is no doubt that
technology
had affect us in many ways, some people opine that
technology
helped to increase
crime
,
while
others opine the contrary, they believe it decrease
crime
and
it
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helped to bust
criminals
. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and elaborate more
in
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this
by giving my opinion.
To begin
with, with
technology
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,technology
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life is becoming easier and the
accsebility
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accessibility
to reach
information
is becoming easier,
however
,
this
access allows
criminals
to reach their goals, internet
criminals
for instance
, because
that
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the internet and social media are becoming an open space that made people's
information
displayed for everyone,
therefore
it is easy to access any person's
information
,
therefore
, supporters
this
concept believe, that
technology
increases the
crime
persantege
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percentage
in the world.
on the other hand
, people who opine that
technology
decreases
crime
all over the world,
they
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claim that high
technology
helped to track all criminal's
information
, a vivid example,
when
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a supermarket face a
bulgrary
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burglary
from strangers, if the police want to catch the
criminals
, they will follow the
criminals
by using the
watiching
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watching
cameras all over the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. In my opinion,
technology
could be a double edge sword, it could make life easier and to increases knowledge, or could make it harder with the wrong usage,
therefore
, the person has to be careful by using
technology
and not share too much
information
with others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • surveillance
  • forensic science
  • cybercrime
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