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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of the cities and into regional areas. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

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Several countries separate their industrial
area
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with
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from
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 housing
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area
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.
Industrial
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The industrial
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area
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 consists
plenty
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of plenty
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 of big companies,
while
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housing
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the housing
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area
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 is the main
city
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, the place
that
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where
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 people spend their time with their relatives and others. I strongly believe that
government
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the government
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 pushing the factories to move to the industrial
area
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 and cleaning up the
city
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 from industrial activity will get
abundance
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an abundance
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 of advantages rather than negative aspects.
This
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gives
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 two notions.
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cleaning up a
city
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 from the factories will progressively
decreases
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 the crowd of the
city
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, which
is have
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direct
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a direct
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 relation with
the
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traffic jam, air pollution, and voice pollution. It can be clearly seen that
the
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business vehicles make cities more polluted, noisy, and
crowd
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crowded
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For instance
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, there is a concrete company in
a
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city
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 centre. The big trucks of
this
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 company will come and go in the town main road bringing big concretes.
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is
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will disrupt the
city
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from
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 many aspects.
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states ideally build a lot of
beatiful
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beautiful
 and useful public
facilities
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 in the
city
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 rather than industrial
facilities
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. Building factories will reduce several
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area
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 that
supposed
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are supposed
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 to
used
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 to build
facilities
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 for the people,
such
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 as
park
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parks
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,
stadium
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stadiums
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,
city
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square
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squares
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,
market
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markets
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,
museum
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museums
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, meeting
building
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buildings
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,
religion
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building
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buildings
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, and
highway
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highways
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. Governments and their societies have to feel free to build their
facilities
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 without
afraid
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being afraid
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the
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 presence of
a
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big industry.
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, the positive aspects of separate businesses
area
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 from the town totally
outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
 the disadvantages.
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 is not only because business areas will disturb the
lifehood
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livelihood
likelihood
 in a
city
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, but
also
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 cut the land that should
used
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 to create plenty of public
facilities
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.

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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