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Many developing countries require aid from international organizations to develop. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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We are living in a world full of catastrophes,
therefore
, there is no doubt about the significance of requiring assistance from international organizations to develop counties that do not have income and countries that are at war. Some
people
 opine that
this
aid
 should be financial,
while
 others opine the contrary, they believe the
aid
 has to be practical. In
this
 essay, I would like to discuss both views and provide my opinion, and elaborate more on
this
 by giving examples.
To begin
 with, supporters of the idea of financial
aid
, believe that every country knows their needs, from food, clothes and medicine,
however
, when any government provides another country with these things, they may not cover their needs, a vivid example what happened with the
last
 earthquake in Syerya, many countries and individual send a practical
aid
,
however
,
people
 needed shelters and homes to live in, and
this
 does not apply with practical
aid
.
on the other hand
,
people
 who stand with the practical
aid
 concept, believe that assistance has to be by food, medicine and clothes, which will guarantee to reach its goals,
hence
, they claim that most of the financial
aid
 has been stolen many times,
therefore
 they claim
that is
this
 the best way to help
people
. In my opinion, I believe that assistance has to be practical and financial because many countries need both, especially during catastrophes, in
this
 ,case
people
 need both ways of
aid
.
Submitted by reemalbarhomi on

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