The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often said that the ultimate goal of

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is to make humans’ lives better. In my opinion, I believe

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point of view because

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helps to eliminate false notions

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improving the quality of life.

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with, the advent of

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has transformed our lives in a positive way, particularly our health. A good example of

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is the development of

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vaccines. Prior to their invention, colossal numbers of people passed away on the grounds that their bodies didn’t have antibodies to combat the virus. Thanks to scientific development, medical companies like Pfizer provided vaccinations for residents in 2020, which helped to boost their immune systems to fight against novel viruses.

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, everyone can now go to the park without wearing masks or using hand sanitiser.

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, the existence of

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can help to eradicate superstitions prevailing in the society. To illustrate, people in ancient times held a belief that bats entering the house meant death and

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was considered to be a bad omen.

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studies conducted by scientists, bats contain a deadly virus called Nipah, which results in severe syndromes

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as delirium, tremors, and violent coughing. With that being said, those who live close to bats are more likely to get infected by its pathogens. In conclusion, the assumption that

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is merely a tool for humans to live easier is not sufficient. In fact,

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omits false beliefs in a population, and it enables us not to mislead ourselves into doing something wrong.

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structure

The essay structure is sound, and you've done a good job of providing clear and relevant examples to support your points. However, there is minor room for improvement. Be sure to fully develop your ideas in each paragraph before moving on to the next one. The connectivity between the first and second body paragraph is a bit loose.

vocabulary

While your vocabulary is generally good, there is scope for better use of advanced vocabulary and semantic precision. For instance, 'colossal numbers of people' could be more effectively communicated using a phrase like 'an immense number of people'.

grammar

Your grammar is generally of a high standard, though I spotted a few minor issues. For example, 'medical companies like Pfizer provided vaccinations for residents in 2020', could be better written as 'medical companies, such as Pfizer, provided vaccines to residents in 2020'. Ensure to use the correct punctuation while writing complex sentences.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

259 words

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advancements
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healthcare
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improving living standards
global issues
climate change
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technological advancements
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nuclear power is far too dangerous, therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources such as hydroelectric power and solar energy.to what extent do you agree.

International travel has many advantages to both travelers and the country that they visited. Do Advantages outweigh the disadvantages?