Some people think there should be free health care for all people but others disagree. Discuss both sides.

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Many
people
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believe that everyone should have free access to
health
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care
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while
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others disagree with
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idea. The first group recognise how free medical
tretaments
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treatments
treatment
could improve
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people
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quality lives
while
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others that think that everything should be private in order to have more quality
health
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care
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centers
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. It is often thought that having more
accesibility
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accessibility
to
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health
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healthcare
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care
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centers
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as well as
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free medicines will improve
peoples
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people's
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health
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as a result
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of developing wealthier societies. As
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a concequence
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concequence
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consequence
is
it
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apply
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believed
this
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will avoid the collapse of some hospitals that are needed to
teat
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treat
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major injuries.
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, if an elder person with
a general flu
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the general flu
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takes
takes
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the right and free medication and follows the
doctors
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doctor's
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advice at
first,
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this
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might avoid the
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hospitalisation
of a
pacient
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patient
that didn't
had
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have
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acces
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access
to general public
health
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.
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hand
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people
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also
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support that the
privatitzation
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privatisation
of those institutions would be
benefitial
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beneficial
on
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to
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the
efficency
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efficiency
of
health
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care
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professionals. Is it said that
this
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would allow
dorctors
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doctors
to dedicate more time during the diagnosing process, avoiding
this
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way
commiting
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committing
any mistake caused by being overloaded with many
patiens
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patients
.
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This
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can be seen
specially
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when services are for free
,
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when
people
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tend to overuse
it
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them
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causing the
health
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professional a rush on diagnosing medicines
instead
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of not focusing on the original cause of the patient.
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