The diagram bellow shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building processes.

The diagram bellow shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building processes.
The diagrams illustrate the way in which
cement
is made and how it is
then
used in the process of making concrete.
Overall
, limestone and clay pass through four stages before being bagged
ready
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and ready
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for use as
cement
which accounts for 15% of the four materials used to produce concrete.
While
the process of making
cement
uses a number of tools, the production of concrete requires only a concrete mixer. In the first stage of making
cement
, limestone and clay are crushed together to form a powder.
This
powder is
then
combined in a mixer before passing into a rotating heater which has constant heat applied at one end of the tube. The resulting mixture is ground in order to produce
cement
. The final product is afterwards put into bags ready to be used. Regarding the second diagram, concrete
consist
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consists
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of mainly grave, which
is
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are
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small stones, and
this
makes up 50% of the ingredients. The other materials used are sand (25%),
cement
(15%), and water (10%). These are all poured into a concrete mixer which continually rotates to combine the materials and ultimately produces concrete.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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