Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outwiegh the disadvantages?

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that pupils at the elementary school are better to start studying a foreign
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rather than in junior high school. I believe that
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children who begin
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a new
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more positive impact, and
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To begin
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kids
get easier to study foreign
language
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. Nowadays,
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exposuring
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exposure
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foreign
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languages
abundant
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, and
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parents have more
choice
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to facilitate their
kids
to learn foreign
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languages
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,
such
as
english
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English
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, mandarin,
japanese
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Japanese
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, and
other
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others
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. Through the
kids
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movie, television
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youtube for
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exposure almost
everyday
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sensitive
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younger children tend to
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to speak a new
language
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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