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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Public library transformation through
recent
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 20 years is shown in the figures. In the past, the building had three rooms located in the down-left, upper-left and upper-right corners. There was an enquiry desk to the right of the entrance doors, where visitors could buy tickets or return books. In the
center
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, tables and chairs were located, surrounded by two adult book corners: fiction genre shelves to the left and non-fiction ones to the right.
Building
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The building
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 had seen several decent changes in the
last
 two decades.
Enquiry
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The enquiry
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 desk was removed, giving space for
cafe
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the cafe
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. Now library clients can use self-service machines nearby the information desk in the middle-right part of the floor. Disk storage was refurbished into an upgraded children's corner with two sofas where storytelling events are happening. In the children’s
books
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 old location,
lecture
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the lecture
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 room takes place now. And
finally
, the reading room was turned into
the
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a
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 space with computers. Indeed, the Central Library has received various upgrades in
the
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apply
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recent years. Digitalization of client service, disk storage and reading experience freed up the space for
such
 facilities as
cafe
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a cafe
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 and upgraded children’s room.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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