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Some people think that visitors to other countries should obey local customs and behaviours. While other people disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #visitors #countries #customs #behaviours #host #country #differences
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In order to better understand the
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 of other countries it is important that both
tourists
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 and locals should
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respect
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 and tolerance for each other. It is very important that
tourists
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respect
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 local cultures as they are representatives of their nation, are guests and could face legal consequences if they breach local laws.
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, it is
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 important that locals are tolerant of
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 in order to develop good relationships and because they support the local economy. In
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 for other
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 and cultures will be discussed. When
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 travel overseas they are freed from the normal restraints of home and may behave in a manner
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 offensive to locals.
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 are both representatives of their country and guests. Poor behaviour will often reflect poorly on both themselves as individuals and their nation as a whole. It is
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 important that all
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show
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respect
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 for others at all times. Failure to
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 at least a minimum level of
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 to others can
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 have legal consequences and result in heavy punishment. It is prudent to
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 a higher level of care when travelling overseas as laws may be very different and
tourists
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 may not understand the full implications of their actions. As far as possible, it is probably a good idea to stay within cultural norms when visiting other countries as doing so
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 means showing a high level of
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 and is likely to lead to a positive experience for everyone.
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, local citizens should
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 remember they are hosts and should
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 some tolerance towards a lack of cultural understanding and local knowledge.
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 support the local economy and assisting them and providing a friendly and respectful environment, including respecting their culture, is
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 important in supporting the relationship between
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as well as
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 the tourist industry. In summary, showing
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 and tolerance towards all
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 is the best way of maintaining a friendly and positive environment for all.
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