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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Write atleast 250 words.

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Situations whether it is good or bad the human species had adapted and strived through many minor and major events. Nowadays some
people
 have the opinion to accept and stay in awful conditions like unsatisfactory jobs or stay in poor scenarios
whereas
 other
people
 believe in improving their living standard through hard work.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and provide a clear factual opinion.
Firstly
, I believe that men who end up in a poor background or dissatisfying work because they do not have a vision in their
life
.
For example
, say a man is earning a good amount of amount
money
 per month and he decides to spend his
money
 lavishly without any planning
thereafter
 by the
last
 week of the month the guy will be facing a shortage of
money
 which explains his poor financial planning.
Secondly
, individuals who have found purpose in their
life
 have the urge to change any bad situations like a displeasing job or shortage of
money
 into a wonderful
life
whereas
people
 who accept staying in poor conditions will continue to be in that state for their whole
life
. There will be no growth for
such
people
.What is good? Is it better to continue in a substandard scenario or strive through the pain and struggles which later on provide success in
life
.
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 In my opinion, individuals who try better to improve their living standards have an upper hand over the guys who put their lives in the mediocre states. Facing problems and sorting them out moulds a human being into a better self.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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