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Parents today often tend to organise extra classes on weekends or even after school. Do you believe this is at all useful? Or, do you think the education provided in school is sufficient?

#parents #organise #classes #weekends #school #education
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perspective
 yes,
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especially
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in
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 a young age,because
thier
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their
barin
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brain
 is extremely clear and so easy to absorb the
informations
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information
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 or even gain idiom
in addition
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learn
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 new skills it may be useful for them in the future like swimming,
hoseback
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horseback
 riding,how to deal with computer,drawing,karate, etc. So
then
 they
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goin
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going
 to be so grateful for us to shorten
alot
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a lot
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in
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 a small age. those skills they did not educate in
the
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school . but of
course
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 without
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 them, we have to give them
a
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space cause
of
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in the end they are
a
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kids and they need to play,have fun and practice
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their
thier
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their
 childhood
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