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The given picture illustrates the life cycle of salmon.

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The given picture illustrates the life cycle of
salmon
.
In
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overall
, the life cycle of a
salmon
 can divide into 3 stages from the beginning of small eggs until it becomes an adult
salmon
. In the early stage,
salmon
 eggs live beside pebbles under the reeds in the
upper-river
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upper river
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 where the water flow is slow. About 5 to 6 months later, the
salmon
 eggs grow into a creature called fry which is 3 to 8
centimeters
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 in length, they
then
 move into lower-river which has rapid current,
they
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and they
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 live there for approximately 4 years until they are more developed in size which is 12 to 15
centimeters
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 and their name
also
 change to smolt. After that, they transfer their home to the open sea for about 5 years before becoming
the
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adult
salmon
, which is 6 times bigger in size in comparison to smolt. At
this
 stage, they move back to the
upper-river
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upper river
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 where they reproduce the next generation of
salmon
.
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