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The bar chart demonstrates how many inhabitants visit every month from June to October in London.

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The bar chart demonstrates how many inhabitants visit every month from June to October in London.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the number of citizens visiting historic, national and scientific
Museums
 was a slight decrease over a 4-month
period
while
 the opposite was true for that of
British
museums
. In August, all
Museums
 were visited the highest. At the beginning of the
period
, the number of people visiting
History
Correct article usage
the History
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Museum
 was 41
thousand
, twice as much as that of national
Museums
while
 citizens visiting Science
Museum
 was 45
thousand
, which was a
thousand
 higher than
British
Museum
. There was a sharp growth over a 2-year
period
. In August, inhabitants visiting
Historic
Correct article usage
the Historic
show examples
, Scientific and
British
Museum
 reached the peak of 60
thousand
,71
thousand
 and 31
thousand
 whilst the figure for Science
Museum
also
 hit the highest point of over 40
thousand
 in July and August. There was a gradual decline over a 2-year
period
. October witnessed a steady decrease to 30
thousand
 in the number of citizens who visited the Science
Museum
 compared to under 20
thousand
 that of the National
Museum
 . At 46
thousand
, the figure for the people visiting the
British
Museum
 was twice as much as that of the History
Museum
.
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