Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

For some
people
,
advertisement
affects crucially
to
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the customers’ perception
about
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why they buy the goods.
In contrast
, others think that
advertisement
is a thing that can be ignored. I will discuss both views and give my opinion. There are two factors why
people
think that
advertisement
is successful in persuading buyers.
First,
a company involve a public figure or an idol to promote the
product
. Fans tend to follow what their idols use and wear.
Therefore
, they will
but
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the
product
although
they do not one hundred
percent
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need it.
Second,
it is caused
of
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the language used in the
advertisement
that is
extremely persuasive. As
effect
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,
people
who watch or listen
the
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advertisement
is usually fallen out or
getting
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curious
with
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the
product
.
This
fact has been proved in some scientific studies that language in
advertisement
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is designed purposively to allure buyers’ attention.
On the other hand
, a number of
people
do not think that
advertisement
is
important
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thing because of two perceptions.
First,
they may be
skeptical
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towards the
product
.
For example
, the
advertisement
of
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body lotion that can brighten the skin. When they notice that the model is already a person with
a
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bright skin, they may think that it is a bit impossible to get the best result
as well as
the model. Or, they may pay attention that there
is
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a few ingredients to realize the claim of the
product
.
Second,
there is a type of
people
who will not be easily affected by the
advertisement
. Those who are trying to scrimp their money will usually consider carefully and rationally
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the goods that they will buy. No matter how amazing the
advertisement
is, it cannot shake them. In conclusion, I tend to support the second view that has been explained above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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