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Modern buildings appear in large numbers, but some people believe that we should build our buildings in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, in the highly industrialized era, living standards have been enhanced considerably,
as well as
 human rights are being paid close attention.
However
, there still remains about whether we should build our buildings in traditional
styles
 or modern
styles
. In my opinion, I completely believe that building style depends on each person's personality.
To begin
 with, when the
benefits
 of modern
styles
 are taken into consideration, we clearly see that modern
styles
 resolve many outstanding issues nowadays. There is no doubt that the trend of utilization rate is growing
day
 by
day
 so
people
 need to resolve
this
 outstanding issue. Starting a modern building will resolve these problems. For more details,
people
 can set up skyscrapers or apartments with many floors meeting the need for human accommodation.
On the other hand
, building traditional houses requires a big acreage of land for
people
 can build.
Next,
in the highly industrialized era, the living standards increase
day
 by
day
 so that building modern houses meet human requirements. For more details, it is well-equipped with modern technologies and these
benefits
 will make human accommodation become more convenient, comfortable, …
On the other hand
, when it comes to the
benefits
 of old buildings, we can recognize that
this
 style has not only aesthetic
values
 but
also
 cultural
values
. First of all, begin with, the aesthetic
values
 of historic buildings. We know that culture is defined by the way of life, especially the general customs and beliefs, of a particular group of
people
 at a particular time.
Besides
 that, culture includes not only
styles
 and food but
also
 accommodation. Of course, the classic house has its beauty, and it is
also
 a symbol of each nation's culture. These
values
 have to keep through time because it is national identity.
In particular
, both
styles
 traditional and modern have their
benefits
 so the building style depends on the personality and needs of each person.
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