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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email 1. Describe where you lived when you were a student at the university 2. Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation 3. Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Jee, I hope
this
 email finds you well. I am writing about your offered ‘’App Development Course”. I am very happy
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your
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 selected at
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the University
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University
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 of Peradeniya. We will discuss the above course details and accommodation.
First,
Congratulations! I am living at Peradeniya
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, Kandy. I
was
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studied at
University
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 of Peradeniya in 2017. I know your location.
That is
 very long. So, you can request
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 a mail to
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the dean
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dean
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 office. I will recommend that. I think if you get accommodation, you can continue your course very
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. Because these days it
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 problem and
also
 high rent. That must
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. Most of the students
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 consider
about
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it.
Furthermore
, after finishing the above process. We can not do anything. Most of the students missed it. But we do not
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. Because we were sending name list and accommodation list to head office. And fill
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 form very carefully. Will give the correct details. You send the email before the closing date. Do not should delay. After finishing that let me know. Yours faithfully, Mathu.P
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to clearly structure your email with an introduction, detailed body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Organize ideas logically and use appropriate connectors to transition between points for enhanced coherence.
task achievement
It's essential to fully address all parts of the task. Provide a more in-depth description of your own living experiences, more comprehensive advice about accommodation search, and clearer warnings about potential mistakes. Expand on each point to ensure a complete response to the prompt.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dormitories
  • rental agreements
  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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