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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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In some nations when students graduate they may take a
year
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 before
applications
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 to universities, so, they are capable of pursuing what they want to do.
Gap
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The gap
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year
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 has become a crucial part of many young people's
life
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,
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, there is no absolute point of view regarding the utility of the phenomenon since it might be considered beneficial by some
insividuals
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individuals
,
while
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 others can find
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 pastime pointless. One of the main positives of
gap
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year
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 is that school leavers appear to be supplied with an opportunity to comprehend their initial desire through multiple jobs.
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, owing to a recent survey, it was justified that
do
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almost two-thirds of all young people in the US have no clue where to continue their studies and what professions are the most appropriate.
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, it would be pointful to take a break after high school in order to indicate suitable occupations by trying their hand at distinctive fields of activity.
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,
this
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 type of recreation has a satisfactory influence on the portfolio of a student as work experience seems to be an aspect that
distinguish
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 him or her from other applicants.
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, when young adults have one
year
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 of
a
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spare time, they jeopardise their acceptance by the universities since
entrance
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the entrance
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 examination is a compulsory part of applications to many higher educational institutes.
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,
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first ranked
institute
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 of
technology
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 in Massachusetts obliges applicants to take an internal test,
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, many young individuals are more likely to fail those exams if there is
no
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paid
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 attention to education during vacation. In conclusion, having weighed everything mentioned
up
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, it may be stated that
gap
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a gap
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year
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 assists to understand what a young person desires and advances applications, whilst it may bring
drawback
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,
such
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 as impaired knowledge when it comes to internal examinations.
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